D'Deridex

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I wrote this during a spree of boredom... its attached.

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My advice is to firstly run a spelling check, there are a few mistakes around.

Secondly, the story is a bit short (well, in comparision with mine, it's molecular). Try to write something more about the spaces there in, the emotions they feel and explain the situation throughly.

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Length and quantity means nothing. Have you never heard of a short story?

Many fo the greatest works of litrature are absolutely tiny in size

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True, Glemp. These advices do only apply on my view on his story, meaning I like long stories and the monstrous describings (sp).

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Descriptions. So do I but it really depends on what the story is about whether it needs to be long or short.